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Người yêu ơi ngoài kia mùa đông đã rơi
恋人よ！外にもう冬が来た
Lạnh không em, lẻ loi bàn tay rã rời
君が寒いのか、震えてる手が孤独だ
Lạc mất nhau từ đâu mà bao yêu dấu vẫn nơi này
一体いつからはぐれたのに、ここは恋愛がまだある
Để nhớ thương đầy vơi vương trên môi mắt cay.
唇に溢れている思い出が残って、目が涙で霞んでいる

Mùa đông ơi, ngoài kia người tôi yêu lẻ loi
冬よ！外に私の恋人が寂しい
Xin hãy gom mây, đừng để mưa mãi rơi lối ấy
雲を集めて、あの人のところに雨をずっと降ってないようにして

Muốn đến bên người cầm tay và sưởi ấm đôi vai gầy
あなたのそばに行きたり、手を取ったり、細い肩を温めたりしたい
Nhưng người, người vẫn đi mưa mãi rơi đầy.
だが、あなたはまだ行って、雨も降ったままだ
[ĐK:]
Lạc mất lối làm sao tìm nhau giữa một trời trắng xóa
行方不明になって、真っ白い空の下に一体どうすればあなたを見えるの
Vì những ân tình người mang theo thành băng giá
あなたの持って来た感情が氷雪のようになったので
Người yêu ơi đừng đi, xin em hãy một lần nhìn lại phía sau
恋人よ！行かないで、一度後ろを振り返ってください
Hãy một lần dù chỉ nhìn thấy nhau, xin hãy một lần.
私たちしか見えなくても、一度お願い。。。

私が子供だったとき、私はいくつかのぬいぐるみを持っていました。彼らは感情、あるいは魂を持っていたように、その時点で、それが見えました。今、私はそれ以上の年齢だと、彼らは忘れてしまった嘘。しかし、私は私が今までにそれらを捨てることができるとは思いません。それは言って恥ずかしいですが、私は私の犬を放棄するようなものだ離れてそれらを投げるように感じます。私は、彼らが本物ではないよ知っているにもかかわらず、私は罪悪感を感じるだろう。

This is just a small practice entry, and I'd appreciate help in correcting the grammar and sentence structure. Here's the original English version for reference:

When I was a child , I had some stuffed animals. At that time, it seemed like they had feelings, or even souls. Now that I am older, they lie forgotten. However, I don't think I could ever throw them away. It is embarrassing to say, but I feel like throwing them away would be like abandoning my dog. I would feel so guilty, even though I know they're not real.

Hopefully it's not too much, and thank you.

Hi! So I was reading this light novel, and one of the antagonist said 「オレとしたことがはまっちまったみたいだなぁ．．．敵の精神攻撃に。」, and I was wondering what does he mean here? The context is that this antagonist is trying to assassinate the main character, and is now discussing his plan with his partner.
I think it means something like "I've gotten hooked to mentally attacking the enemy" but I'm not sure;;

It'd also help if you can enlighten me on what ~としたことが means since I've seen it quite a few times and yet I still don't get it...; I've tried looking some stuffs up but they said "Toshitakotoga = of all people"...?

Thanks in advance everyone!

Hi,

I'd like some help to translate a sentence I don't understand in a text about energy in medecine.

Here it goes : 《無形ながら相感応するもの》
And here is what I managed to translate "Something that does .... while being immaterial"

Thank you in advance.

Hello,

I've been trying to translate this: "ゼロの叙情100のバラード" (it's the title of a doujinshi I just bought). I know what the words mean (I admit, I did have to look up the kanji...), but I'm confused as to how it fits together...grammar was one of my stronger points when I studied Japanese, but I've been out of practice for a very long time.

Anyway, various generic online translators came up with things like "100 lyrical ballad zero", "100 ballads of lyrical zero", and other variations that read like a literal translation nightmare.

I'm wondering if lyrical is the right way to translate "叙情" in this context, though. It can also mean expression of feelings, right? Is it possible this could mean something like "100 ballads, zero expressions/lyrics"? I'm sad to say this has me stumped, because it seems like it should be quite simple >.<

Any help will be much appreciated!

cross-posted to japanese

Just the other day I realized I didn't know how to say much in Japanese, and I'm trying to fix that by doing more composition. (In other words, I'm at a lower level than most of the people who post here...)

I wanted this to say "the night is dark and full of terrors".

夜は真っ暗と恐怖でいっぱいだ。

I wasn't sure if I could just chain dark and full of terrors that way, or if there's a better way to do it. Also, am I getting words with the right connotations?

Thank you in advance for your help. I'd like to start using this board frequently.

Okay, so, in a comic I'm translating, there is a sort of "sound effect" note that says 解法区～

So far, can't find any evidence this is a real word/words. Did find that 解法 (かいほう) can be "the key to a solution" and that 解放区 (かいほうく) is a "liberated zone/area".

The context sort of works as I'm pretty sure they're making a joke about how one character is wearing too large a shirt, and the other is staring at the exposed area of their chest. It could be like a liberated zone, right? XD

Is it a play on words? I know the joke probably won't work in English, but I at least want to know what it's supposed to say. :)

Thanks!

I'm trying to find a kanji and I can't seem to find it in Jim Breen under any radical I try to look it up by. It's 写, but without the hat.

Does anyone else ever have this problem? Every once in a while, I run across kanji that I just cannot find in Jim Breen---either I can't find any radicals that it goes under, or there are `too many characters' for it to show under the radicals it does have.